My Assignment
I'm afraid I'll get an F on this one. The only suggestion I ended up using in my piece was Pirate Jimmy's. Sorry. But if it's any consolation, I give you the first three grafs of my story:
The Swineherd
His teeth were wearing down. He tried not to grind them, but if he lost concentration for a moment, he found himself tensing his jaw and temples again. When he awoke each morning, his jaw was sore from grinding his teeth in his sleep. His hunger pangs had pulled his face into a constant grimace; even when he felt no emotion, he was still hungry, and his face showed it.
The pigs were different. No emotion has ever been discerned on a pig's face, and their disfigurement was only the leanness of their bodies. They were perhaps more stubborn than usual and seemed to protest everything with their awful squeals.
There was no one to tell the herder about his face. He had not seen another human being for weeks. A few months ago, from a distance, he saw a figure silhouetted on a hilltop, but neither of them made any effort to acknowledge each other. The herder shifted his course slightly, away from the hill, and drove the pigs a little faster. No one could be trusted in the famine. That's why he carried the rifle.
5 Comments:
Nice! There shall be no F for you, silly. And I'm glad you shared--I was getting impatient as last Tuesday had passed us long ago.
You shall be rewarded with an A++ for using my suggestion in your paper. As for the writing, it is very good! When can we expect another installment?
I did come up with another suggestion for your next paper. Include the word "penultimate" meaning second to last.
I never thought to offer this suggestion before, but hopefully in your wisdom you snuck in the fine word 'ungulate' wherever appropriate!
i still don't know whY we don't all just go to Stuckey Bowl !
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